Unburied Hatchet

Until I saw those wasted hands,
brittle as chalk, I hadn’t thought
how fast the years make ghosts.

I heard them once called brawler’s paws.
For me, they were always more:
cobras, poised to strike.

But his brawling days are gone now;
I could kill him with a pillow,
if I cared enough to try.

Thin sheets press tightly to a bed
more empty than full, his body broken
like the promises of childhood.

Haunted eyes betray last thoughts
of a dim path, spiralling down.
He hopes to make amends.

“Forgiven?” he croaks,
barely there, as always,
and I’m wishing that I wasn’t.

With the last rays of day as witness,
I turn my back with purpose
and hear the silence roar.

In a late-night bar I catch my reflection
swimming in a glass of bourbon;
but I’m staring at a ghost.

Ryan Stone

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First published in Writers’ Forum Magazine issue 163, April 2015 – first place


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156 responses to “Unburied Hatchet”

  1. I had goosebumps while reading the last sentences. This is very beautiful โœจ

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    1. What lovely feedback. Thank you so much, Anoushka!

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    1. Thank you ๐Ÿ™‚

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  2. Wow! A brilliant pieceโ€ฆ.
    Loved reading it
    Thank you for sharing !

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    1. Thank you for your thoughtful words ๐Ÿ™‚

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      1. My absolute pleasure ๐Ÿ˜Šโ™ฅ๏ธ

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  3. Wow so good ryan!

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    1. Hello, Taha. Thanks so much for your kind words!

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  4. Very moving.

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    1. Thank you so much ๐Ÿ™‚

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  5. Love this ๐Ÿ˜ฉ

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    1. Thank you, Chevvi ๐Ÿ™‚

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  6. Congratulations

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    1. Thank you ๐Ÿ™‚

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  7. Wow! That’s amazing writing. Thank you for sharing.

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    1. Hi, Jay. Thanks so much! Really appreciated ๐Ÿ™‚

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      1. You’re very welcome. I had to reblog on my site, so others get to see it, read it and hopefully subscribe to you. All the very best.

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      2. Legend! Thanks so much

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    Maggie Mae

    WOW! You must have heard that a thousand times from this piece. But what else could we really say?? SO IMPACTFUL!

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    1. What a lovely comment to receive! Thank you so much, Maggie Mae – truly grateful ๐Ÿ™‚

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  10. Poetically dramatic and insightful, and two finale stanzas are outstanding, Ryan …

    “With the last rays of day as witness,
    I turn my back with purpose
    and hear the silence roar.

    In a late-night bar I catch my reflection
    swimming in a glass of bourbon;
    but Iโ€™m staring at a ghost.”

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    1. Thanks so much, Ivor ๐Ÿ™‚

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      1. You’re welcome Ryan …

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  11. Well said. Thanks for sharing with us

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    1. Thank you ๐Ÿ™‚

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  12. Amazing keep going I want more

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    1. Thank you, Tabetha. Very kind ๐Ÿ™‚

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  13. Not all who wander are lost Avatar
    Not all who wander are lost

    Wow

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    1. Thank you ๐Ÿ™‚

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  14. I love both your voice and your poem!
    In one wordโ€™ Magic!โ€™

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    1. Too kind, Anita. Thank you ๐Ÿ™‚

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    2. The pleasure is mine,Ryan !

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  15. Wow!! When you put pen to paper you mean business. Very, very nicely done!
    Pat

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    1. Thanks so much, Pat! ๐Ÿ™‚

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  16. “His body broken like the promises of childhood.” This hit hard. I’m in awe at this entire writing. Amazing work friend.

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    1. Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment – really appreciate it ๐Ÿ™‚

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  17. Outstanding work this had me hooked by first five words . Love love this keep it up

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    1. Thank you, Tabetha ๐Ÿ˜Š

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