Coal Town

Birds don’t stop in this town.
I see them fly past, black peppering
blue, going someplace. I’ve given up
dreaming wings. This town
will know my bones. Condoms
sell well in Joe’s corner store – boredom breeds
but breeding’s a trap, a twitch in the smile
of those steel-eyed shrews
who linger late after church.
I walked half a day, out past the salt flats,
after they closed the movie house down. Smoked
the joint she’d brought back from college
when she returned to bury my dad.
I remember how pale her fingers lay
across my father’s hands –
coal miner’s hands, tarred like his lungs;
like this town.

Ryan Stone

First published in Eunoia Review, July 2016.

Winner of the Goodreads Monthly Poetry Contest, August 2016.

First Place in Poetry Nook contest 101, November 2016.

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162 responses to “Coal Town”

  1. a brilliantly sad portrayal!

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    1. Thank you, Amit. I really appreciate you taking the time to read and leave a comment – it means so much πŸ™‚

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      1. you are welcome … I have been through some hectic time and pledge due apologies for my recent lack of engagement.

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      2. No apologies, mate – I’ve been a stranger myself. I hope your hard times are at an end and the sun is shining over you. Take care.

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      3. that is indeed very kind of you… it has not ended though, guess I am growing used to it πŸ˜€ …

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      4. Be strong, my friend. I wish you the best of luck πŸ™‚

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      5. now that means a lot… I am grateful for your wishes!

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  2. Your words portray despair with such resolve. I felt like I was there. Congratulations on the publication πŸ™‚

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    1. Thank you so much! Truly appreciated πŸ™‚

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      1. As always, it was my pleasure reading your lines. πŸ™‚

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      2. Too kind. Thank you πŸ™‚

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  3. Congratulations, Ryan! Fantastic piece! πŸ™‚

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    1. Thank you so much, dear Kelly. How have you been? Well, I hope πŸ™‚

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      1. You’re very welcome, Ryan! Yes, doing well, thank you, enjoying the summertime πŸ™‚

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      2. Excellent! Happy to hear it. And very midwinter jealous πŸ˜‰

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      3. So funny to think of that! You probably get more writing done though, so I guess it’s not all bad. I know I write a lot more when the weather isn’t so great. Hang in there! πŸ™‚

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      4. So true! Have a magic weekend when it arrives for you, Kelly πŸ™‚

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      5. You as well, Ryan. πŸ™‚

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  4. Congratulations Ryan. Lovely and sad poem, beautifully written. ~ Mia

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    1. Thank you, dear Mia. I apologise for not replying to your email yet. Today! I hope you’ve been well πŸ™‚

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      1. You’re welcome Ryan. Thank you, wishing you well too. πŸ™‚

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  5. Yusra Gulab Jamman Avatar
    Yusra Gulab Jamman

    “This town will know my bones…” ~ So moving & evocative, Ryan! You really transported me to another world with this one. Well-deserved as always. Congratulations! Power to your pen ^_^

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    1. Thank you, dear Yusra. I’ve been wanting to get a poem on Eunoia for ages – stoked! I hope you’ve been well πŸ™‚

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  6. I am happy for you!! Yay!! Way to go Ryan, and the poem is a perfect choice. Loved it!

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    1. Thank you, Dajena. I’m still smiling about it πŸ™‚

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      1. πŸ™‚

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  7. mandibelle16 Avatar
    mandibelle16

    Congrats on the publishing! This is wonderful, especially with the picture. When I read this,I get the feeling like this coal miners dust, and debris from the coal mine covers everything and everyone in this whole town; as if it’s choking them. Keep up the great work πŸ™‚

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    1. Thanks so much, Amanda πŸ™‚

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  8. Poignant and dignified. This is beautiful, Ryan.

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    1. Lovely feedback, thank you πŸ˜€

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    Heartafire

    You really got to the heart of this Ryan, eloquent writing beautifully moving.

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    1. Too kind! Thank you so much πŸ™‚

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  10. I can feel the slow, inevitable decay of this town through your words and art Ryan. It is an amazing piece of writing, congratulations! – Lola

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    1. Thank you for your love,y words, Lola πŸ™‚

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      1. It is always a pleasure to visit your page Ryan. πŸ™‚

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  11. […] poem Coal Town is a finalist in this month’s Goodreads poetry […]

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  12. Superb poem. Hope to see you on the WF forum soon, been a while. All best

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    1. Hello, Shirley! Thank you so much. You’re right-it’s been ages. I’ll head over tonight. How have you been? So nice of you to stop by πŸ™‚

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  13. leslieanneonus Avatar
    leslieanneonus

    *Sigh* Hands down, Ryan and congratulations! πŸ™‚

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    1. Thank you my beautiful friend. I’ve missed you.

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        leslieanneonus

        I’ve missed you too, hugs! πŸ™‚

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  14. Oh wow. This was amazing! Really captured so much with such description. Congratulations on winning the Good Reads Monthly Poetry Contest. Great achievement!

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    1. G’day, Shaun. Thanks so much, mate – I’m still buzzing!

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      1. I’m not surprised! It’s the kind of thing that will stick with you πŸ™‚ Truly well deserved too!

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      2. Thanks so much πŸ™‚

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    Marcella Dooney

    I was not aware of you before but “Coal Town” really got me. I escaped one! Will look for more of your writing.

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    1. Hi, Marcella. Thanks so much for your kind comment. I love to hear when a poem connects. You’re most welcome here – I hope you’ll find more that you like. Thank you for taking the time to leave me some feedback-truly appreciated. I’m glad you managed to get away πŸ˜‰

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  16. So lovely~!

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    1. Thank you so much πŸ™‚

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    1. Thank you πŸ™‚

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  17. Powerful, poignant and profound. You have a rich voice.

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    1. Thank you, Ros πŸ™‚

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  18. This is a sentiment to a lost world, of the cause and the reason, of those who are staying and those who are leaving. It’s a story uniquely repeated

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    1. Thanks for reading, Bjorn πŸ™‚

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  19. Love the starkness in this one Ryan…

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    1. Thanks so much πŸ™‚

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  20. This poem makes me feel claustrophobic. You capture the stifling life of a small-town resident very well.

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    1. Thank you πŸ™‚

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  21. Congratulations on the acclaim your poem has already earned. I like your art work that goes with your poetry.

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    1. Thank you so much, Frank. I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. Sometimes the pictures take longer than the poems! πŸ™‚

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  22. “black peppering
    blue, going someplace” … I love this.

    “This town
    will know my bones.” … This is so awesome alone, but then the added layering of “Condoms” makes it even more interesting.

    “boredom breeds
    but breeding’s a trap, a twitch in the smile” … So good.

    “after they closed the movie house down. Smoked
    the joint she’d brought back from college” … Your line breaks are the best!

    That closing. Oh my word, you’re REALLY gifted.

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    1. Fuck! Thank you doesn’t even cut it πŸ™‚

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      1. Jericho Avatar
        Jericho

        Seriously talented, man. Stay in the zone. Protect your brain. And keep doing your thing. You’ve got IT.

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  23. clipped wings described with with a soulful air…the ‘writer’ howls silently at the knowledge that he/she too is destined for the same prison.

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    1. Spot on. Thank you, Paul.

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  24. Dark and gritty, with undertones of fading into the grey, and death ~ Excellent share Ryan ~ Wishing you a good weekend ~

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    1. Thank you, Grace. I hope yours is filled with magic too πŸ™‚

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  25. Always a pleasure to read you, dear Ryan. Hope you’ve been well. How’s Summer treating you?

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    1. Good thanks, my friend. How about you? I’m loving the summer days, beaches and sunshine πŸ™‚

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      1. Lucky you! It’s winter here. Brrrr

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  26. A sad reality in words and imagery.

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    1. As always, thank you for taking the time to leave me your thoughts πŸ™‚

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  27. This is brilliant. Tragic but very good.

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    1. Way too kind, but thanks so much πŸ™‚

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  28. A brilliantly poetic finale to your wondrous poem Ryan…
    “I remember how pale her fingers lay
    across my father’s hands –
    coal miner’s hands, tarred like his lungs;
    like this town”.

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    1. Thank you, Ivor. Very kind. I hope you’ve been well.

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      1. My pleasure Ryan, and I’m going ok, during these times of uncertainty

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  29. A beautiful melancholy!

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    1. Thank you for your kindness

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  30. Sounds like a place, nobody wants to get, trapped by and in.

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    1. Definitely. Thank you πŸ™‚

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  31. Still a superb read Ryan …

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    1. Thanks, Ivor. Have a great weekend, mate

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  32. Wow fuck this is so good!

    “I remember how pale her fingers lay
    across my father’s hands –
    coal miner’s hands, tarred like his lungs;
    like this town.”

    Incredible Ryan

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    1. Haha! Thank you πŸ™‚

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  33. You’re so welcome!

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  34. somtooti Avatar

    Great

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    1. Thank you, Rochelle

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    1. Thank you, Anita πŸ™‚

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  35. Poetry Goddess - Luna B Avatar
    Poetry Goddess – Luna B

    How sad.

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    1. Thank you for reading πŸ™‚

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  36. We have one of these near my town. They took the larger part of it down. It’s sad for sure. These should be monuments. People worked themselves to death to keep things running and should be honored. Great post

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    1. Thanks so much for reading. Great insight, by the way

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      1. Thank you πŸ’— and you’re welcome. Reading this was my pleasure.

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  37. Sigh. So well deserving of publication and prizes….

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    1. Rajani! Thank you kindly πŸ™‚

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  38. Congratulations Ryan😍

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    1. Thank you, Taha πŸ™‚

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  39. It delves into themes of stagnation, disillusionment and the harsh realities of life in a small town . The reference to “steel-eyed shrews” implies a sense of judgment or scrutiny from the townsfolk. The comparison of the narrator’s father’s hands to coal miner’s hands reflects the harshness and toil of life in the town, tying into the overall theme of confinement and entrapment.
    It’s remarkable!!;

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    1. Wow! Thanks for the deep read and great feedback. So glad you pulled so many relevant details from it. Truly appreciate your time and thoughtfulness – it means the world πŸ™‚

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  40. I look for certain emotions to be pulled from me, when reading poetry. I’m addicted to that full, plump bittersweet melancholy, that settles nicely in my chest, which certain poets beautifully awaken, with their potent, evocative style. Lovely poem.

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    1. Lovely feedback, thank you. I really appreciate your thoughtful comments Thank you for reading

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      1. You’re welcome. I’m looking forward to exploring more of your work. I enjoy many types of poetry, but, like many people, love specific styles, and your style resonates with me.

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      2. Truly flattered. Thank you πŸ™‚

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  41. ‘black peppering the blue’ got me hooked so soon!

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    1. Lovely! Thank you πŸ™‚

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  42. Brilliant work!! ❣️

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  43. Brilliant work ❣️

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    1. Thanks so much πŸ™‚

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  44. Beautifuly written!
    It potrys sad yet city with memories, realistic view over it, that gives a tone of melanchony. Beautiful🌹

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    1. Thank you πŸ™‚

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  45. a terrific piece: count me in as a subscriber: I like writing that puts me ‘there’ —

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    1. Thanks so much, John. I really appreciate your kind words.

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  46. You’re most welcome πŸ™

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  47. How wonderfully potryed poetry. Amazing awesome πŸ‘Œ ❀

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    1. Thank you πŸ™‚

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