Breaking Point

Pa, I see you in your shed–
unaware of dusk settling
over your garden, painting
your pink crabapple blossoms
grey. I see you bend, to squint
at some small imperfection
marring the wooden soldier
you’ve spent the whole day carving,
hands slow-dancing to a tune
no-one else can hear. Later
Ma will shake her head, dismiss
your need for perfect contours
and seamless joins as foolish,
not understanding a man,
a soldier or a husband
is only ever as strong
as his weakest part.

Ryan Stone


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17 responses to “Breaking Point”

  1. emotionalspaces Avatar
    emotionalspaces

    Hello ‘old’ friend. I got breathless for a moment.

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    1. Why hello there! Thank you so much. I’m so glad you dropped by πŸ™‚

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        emotionalspaces

        Pleasure all mine, mate!

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  2. what a tribute to your father – seamless. like father, like son.

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    1. Thank you, Beth. I hope your weekend is filed with magic πŸ™‚

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  3. Ryan, beautifully written, somber notes and stunning imagery. Please enjoy the rest of your weekend. ~ Mia

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    1. Very kind, dear Mia. Thank you for taking the time to read. My weekend has been very peaceful for a change – lots of time curled up reading Harry Potter to my boys and our kitten. Take Care πŸ™‚

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      1. You’re welcome, Ryan. Enjoy your time with your boys and kitten, sounds lovely. πŸ™‚

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  4. Subtly emotional piece

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    1. Thank you, Kunal πŸ™‚

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    mandibelle16

    A very wise piece and a wonderful story with strong imagery. Ma doesn’t understand the detail why the pieces must be perfect, but your last three lines resonated with me. A man, a soldier, a husband, I know you’ve had experience with all three. Perhaps pa did too? But for me, what resonated that competition in general, say, a game of chess, means defending and improving upon your weaknesses. I had a basketball couch in junior high and high school who said almost what you say, that ‘ a team is only as good as it’s weakest player,’ along with, ‘practice doesn’t make perfect
    , perfect practice makes perfect.’ I would think Pa would be agreeable with the perfect practice part’ as away of defending, preventing weakness.

    Cheers Ryan have a lovely week!

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    1. Hiya, Mandi! First of all – love your new avatar! I’ve missed your feedback – wonderful and intuitive as ever. Thank you πŸ™‚

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        mandibelle16

        Thank you Ryan. My One BFF got married a couple weeks ago and weddings are always great times to do pictures of e/o dressed up πŸ™‚ I’m glad you like the feedback and that it helps cheers πŸ™‚

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  6. It’s hard to see a strong person start to fade away. It’s hard for that person. It’s hard for the people watching them.

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    1. Certainly takes a toll on all involved. Thanks, Beth. I hope you’re well πŸ™‚

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