Although science, with clinical wisdom
declared her not yet a person,
a heartbeat argued defiantly
for a night.
We visit the cemetery —
hands entwined, minds
in different hemispheres,
hearts mangled.
In a quiet corner
where the sun lingers late in summer,
where gelid moans soften in winter,
we become broken pieces
of something once much stronger.
Ryan Stone
First published by Red River Review, August 2017
This is heartbreaking and so beautifully written. The part which stands out to me the most is: “Hands entwined, minds in different hemispheres, hearts mangled…” You are so good at “showing” so much so succinctly. Amazing work.
Ohh.. I hope this is not autobiographic dear Ryan. So much pain, but so beautifully written.
The ability to bring out emotions whole on paper just as it is inside, raw and unadulterated, is something else. I wish you loads of strength and faith!
And what a fine painter too! As for the writing, can’t get better than this. The sense of loss leaving your readers with a heavy heart, if not in tears.
This knotted my stomach because of the truth it holds in experience for people. An amazing piece Ryan. Heartbreaking, and you absolutely captured and conveyed that heartbreak.
” where gelid moans soften
in winter, we become broken pieces
of something once much stronger.” — beautiful truth my friend, poetically expressed.
Ryan, I can’t possibly imagine how this feels. My sentiments. Beautiful piece, and lovely painting.
Beautifully heartbreaking, the poem is perfection. “Hearts mangled” says it all, I can feel it.
Thank you once again. This one’s about as personal as I get and your kind comments are warmly received 🙂
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Thank you for your kindness. I have two adorable sons so it is easy for me to focus on the light. This poem was good healing at the time and I like how it helps me revisit and remember 🙂
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Indeed, and what a joy that is 🙂 Thomas has all the good blogs/readers, which is why I went there to gather some up when I opened this most recent blog–beats the heck out of typing in “poetry” and trying to find blogs you actually want to read regularly…there’s a lot of wasted words out there in the blogosphere 😉
Amazing creation,words expressing emotions like this is rare and commendable.Expressing such a plot even in fiction gives chill down the spine.My compliments to the author
Thanks so much for taking the time to leave such thoughtful feedback – it means the world 🙂
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Haunting yet beautiful. It’s amazing that you can evoke such strong emotions with so few words.
it’s difficult to work through experiences like this, but somehow poetry makes it a little more manageable. thanks for sharing this and being vulnerable.
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