Tired Tune

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19 responses to “Tired Tune”

  1. Fantastically well-controlled! The third stanza is especially masterful. And the connection between the opening and closing stanzas is very poignant. You handled the rhymes and the structure so well! *takes copious notes* ๐Ÿ˜€ Is there a name for this type of poem?

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    1. Maybe a Ry-ku…or a Stonnet…lol, I know you’ll appreciate corny, Yusra ๐Ÿ˜‰
      No-it’s just my usual mish-mash – thanks for your kindness ๐Ÿ˜„

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      1. LOL corny?? What is corny??? Ryku and stonnet is utter genius in my opinion! Hahah thanks for the smiles ๐Ÿ˜€

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  2. Grieving lost love at the end of life and trying to reconcile choices… but it’s futile. Are you in a sad mood? LOL! Seriously, it was beautifully poignant and I think applicable to many lives.:)

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    1. Hi, Kelly! Hope you’ve had a nice weekend. Thanks once again for such nice feedback ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

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      1. You’re welcome, Ryan! Hope you are having a nice weekend as well ๐Ÿ™‚

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  3. Oh wow. This is amazing. ๐Ÿ’–

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    1. Very kind of you, Sarah. Thanks!

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      1. I’m not sure why this isn’t letting me like the post, but I’ll come back later and try again.

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      2. Thanks, Sarah. WP has been a bit glitchy lately for some reason. I appreciate the thought.

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      3. I agree, it has. No worries. I’ll be back. ๐Ÿ˜Š

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  4. Beautiful, Ryan…. I know that radio very well.. You described it perfectly.

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    1. Hopefully the song is a bit more upbeat these days ๐Ÿ˜Š

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      1. It has it static days but it’s not in AM stereo at least ๐Ÿ˜‰

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  5. Man, I’m glad to be here reading your words, Ryan. For me, this poem reminds me of some of the reasons why I don’t often listen to the radio. Beautifully observed.

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    1. Thanks so much – wonderful feedback. I’m stoked to have you reading too!

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    moonskittles

    You know my eyes would always go, to the part where letters adjacent make the same sound. Just that line alone is gorgeous! The drunk ears on their sorrows and news alike.

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    1. Thank you once more for making me smile ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

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        moonskittles

        happy you are! ๐Ÿ˜€

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