Petrichor 5-7-5

Her hair smelled of hay,
summer rain and first kisses;
breathless, petrichor.

His fingers trembled
childhood’s last tattoo, across
her pale, arching spine.

Ryan Stone

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17 responses to “Petrichor 5-7-5”

    1. Thank you ๐Ÿ™‚

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  1. This is fantastic! You managed to convey both the innocence and desire of the moment in so few lines. Love it! ๐Ÿ’•

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    1. And you just made my day ๐Ÿ™‚ Thank you, Georgette.

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      1. My pleasure. โ˜บ๏ธ

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  2. mmmm…..love this Ryan! Summer and innocence- reminds me when I was a little girl playing in my neighbors haystacks. You’re so good :))

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    1. Thank you, Souldiergirl. To be able to stir a memory like that is such a compliment. You’ve brightened my day once again, thank you for taking the time to comment ๐Ÿ™‚

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      1. You are so welcome! Thank you Ryan for sharing your gift- You are a natural and I love to read your works- I have catching up to do :))

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    A. M. Yeager

    LOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVE!!!!!

    Ryan, seriously, you need to put all your haiku together and publish. I just read this one on the W.S.S. this morning. I wish I could write haiku how you do! ๐Ÿ˜€

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    1. You’re far too kind, Al but I won’t say no to such lovely feedback. Thank you for making me smile ๐Ÿ™‚

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  4. Love it!!!

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    1. Thank you, Shayne. So nice of you ๐Ÿ™‚

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  5. That’s lovely Ryan! Simple, elegantly done – love it!

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    1. Thank you, Nicky. Simple – that’s me;)

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    moonskittles

    I am in love with this word (and of course I have written about it) What a sincere and pure time. The stories you tell, the feelings you arise, mixed with the smell of earth after the rain.

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    1. Wow, such amazing feedback. Thank you, Dajena – you inspire me to write more.

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        moonskittles

        ๐Ÿ˜€ you are welcome, and so do you!! ๐Ÿ™‚

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