Until I saw those wasted hands,
brittle as chalk, I hadn’t thought
how fast the years make ghosts.
I heard them once called brawler’s paws.
For me, they were always more:
cobras, poised to strike.
But his brawling days are gone now;
I could kill him with a pillow,
if I cared enough to try.
Thin sheets press tightly to a bed
more empty than full, his body broken
like the promises of childhood.
Haunted eyes betray last thoughts
of a dim path, spiralling down.
He hopes to make amends.
“Forgiven?” he croaks,
barely there, as always,
and I’m wishing that I wasn’t.
With the last rays of day as witness,
I turn my back with purpose
and hear the silence roar.
In a late-night bar I catch my reflection
swimming in a glass of bourbon;
but I’m staring at a ghost.
Ryan Stone
First published in Writers’ Forum Magazine issue 163, April 2015 – first place
Oh my, this is utterly haunting and profound. It certainly hit home with me. Wow…
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Thank you so much, Georgette. The personal ones can be tricky π
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Indeed they can; again, so glad I came across your writing. π
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Thank you – the feeling is mutual π
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Wow! So good, Ryan.
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Hi, Sarah! Thank you very much π
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Congratulations on first prize, a very deserved winner. Superb poem.
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Thanks so much, Shirley – it was a nice surprise π
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Wow, this is amazing! I love both the poem and the creative painting! Tip my lady hat for you, Ryan! π
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You’re too kind, Heather. Thank you again, your comments always make me smile π
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Well deserved as this poem is very haunting… Is this another side of you?
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Many layers, like an onion π
Thanks so much, Joci – I’m still smiling.
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Congratulations, R! π
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Thank you, L π
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So sorry Ryan, unexpected visitors last night have made me rather late in responding to your piece. Yes Ryan… We’ve all been there – richly told and caught me, as it should…
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Really appreciate it. Thank you π
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And how fast we cannot tell ghosts from thin air..
congrats!
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Thank you π
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Thank you for your friendship, Dajena π
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Breathtaking. I have goosebumps on my arms. I nearly didn’t respond in case my words cheapened what I had just read. Spectacular.
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Not cheapened-enhanced. Thank you so much for your kind feedback. It means the world.
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It is even sadder with your voice.. one brilliant piece this is!
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This is wonderful.
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Ryan, this really hit me. How deeply moving. I could imagine the scene as I read this. So visual and gripping.
I can see why this one, is a favourite. Thank you for sharing.
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Thank you for the opportunity, Jen. Glad you liked it-always good when nice things evolve from unpleasant ones π
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I love it. Yes, things in life happen, all for a reason. π
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Reblogged this on INK AND QUILL and commented:
It gives me great pleasure to share this poem, by Ryan Stone. Long after reading, I was left in thought. Such power and emotion in these words. Thank you for sharing Ryan.
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Thank you so much, Jen π
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My pleasure hun! β€οΈ
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Wow Ryan I came back to this page wanted to read this powerful winner poem again and more I found…your nice voice which add more power and feelings it make the poem live! That’s wonderful no wonder why this captured the first place! I see some personal life in it! often when we give our own inner it turn a winner and most of all it happens when we write about sad life events. It was the same for my published poem “Emotions” is part of my personal life events and it got chosen to be published! Congratulations this one is an amazing poem! π β€
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You are so lovely, Carolina. Thank you for brightening my world with your thoughtful comments and congratulations once again on ‘Emotions’ π
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Thank you very much!
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I got thrilled again Ryan lol
https://yesterdayafter.com/2016/05/10/poetry-visual-verse-published-my-short-story-poignant-pondering/
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Wow! You’re on fire!! Congratulations again, my friend. Enjoy the ride π
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LoL…thank you!
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Ryan, I just listened to the audio on this one, so blown away! This adds such depth, and richness to the intensity here. Bravo!
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Thank you, Elizabeth. I don’t think my Aussie accent goes particularly well with poetry…it’s better suited to cheering at football matches, ordering a beer in a crowded bar, etc… You just made my morning π
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Oh, then I guess I should gush on about how I would love to hear it ordering a beer, yelling at crowds, whispering quietly….yes dear, it was truly lovely. Do more. Pretty please. With cherries. Xo
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π you’re much too kind. There’s a couple more that have audio links if you really feel the need to torture yourself. Thank you again, Elizabeth.
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Oh, really?!? Are you going to make me hunt them down then? Yes, I totally will. π
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Here are a couple to get you started π
https://daysofstone.wordpress.com/2015/02/06/leaving-violet-town/
https://daysofstone.wordpress.com/2015/12/07/f-gm1m2-r2-2/
https://daysofstone.wordpress.com/2015/04/19/williamstown-night/
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this piece is incredible….amazing writing..i read it a few times and discovered something new each time…
glad to read it..
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Wow! Thank you for such thoughtful feedback. You just made my night π
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Raw, evocative and powerful! Really struck a deep and resonant chord. Brilliant and relatable state of affairs. Love the audio.
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Thank you so much. Your comment has made my day π
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“Brittle as chalk” and “How fast the years make ghosts,” wonderful. And the emotional impact of the last line is substantial. Thanks for posting!
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Thank you for reading and leaving such nice feedback π
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Wow, this is heavy. I love the physical description of a one-time brawler reduced to a ghost…great analogy! I saw courage in that turned back and that deafening silence. I don’t quite subscribe to the belief that because someone is dying that we are to bend to their wishes. No, if there is to be forgiveness, it will come in your own time…if at all. Haunting final image though…no pun intended. And too, congratulations for your poem winning first place. It is excellent!
Gayle ~
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Hi, Gayle. Thank you for visiting and for the time you’ve invested in your comments. You’re very insightful and your feedback is so warmly received. Thank you, have a wonderful weekend π
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You’re most welcome, Ryan, and enjoy your weekend as well.
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This is a wonderful piece.. to me it talks about how those words we hurl are always there… if all is wasted I am sure those words would be there as serpents in a desert
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Exactly so. Thank you, Bjorn.
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I adore this one.
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Truly appreciated. Thank you for your kindness π
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If I remember correctly, this was the first poem of yours I ever read, Ryan. Still does the job, and so much more. I guess that’s the mark of a truly great poem – you can come back to it after a long time and it still moves you in the same way.
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I couldn’t appreciate your comments any more, mate. Thank you π
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I can relate to this. As Gayle said, forgiveness demanded is further oppression. I’ve been there, am there. It probably took a lot of courage to pen this. Thanks for doing so.
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Thank you for such thoughtful understanding. I wish you the best of luck π
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This is the kind of scene I can imagine being played out so often for so many people. You capture the bitterness, the regrets and the emptiness so well, and the last thought, of history repeating itself perhaps must haunt so many.
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I had plenty to work with. Thanks for your kind words, Jane π
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My pleasure, Ryan π
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Such a raw and honest write, which repeats itself all too often. A brave and cathartic poem. Thank you for sharing.
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Thank you for reading, Beverly π
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Bone stirring! Those lines really did make me shudder. Wonderful writing!
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Thank you so much, Tanya π
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The passage of time can either heal us or not ~ Gritty and haunting write ~ Thanks for sharing Ryan ~
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Thank you, Grace π
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This is superb, Ryan.
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Thank you, Yagnesh. I’m glad you think so π
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Haunted eyes betray last thoughts
of a dim path, spiralling down.
He hopes to make amends.
You certainly have a way with words! Beautifully haunting!
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Thank you so much π
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This is beautiful, as usual.
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Too kind! Thank you so much π
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The twist at the end revealing the true ghost, is superb. The act of forgiving then is as vital as breath and blood.
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I’m happy you took that from it. Thank you for your kind words π
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Great job!
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Thank you π
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The honesty of not wanting to be there and the likenings were very good.
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Thank you kindly π
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Ryan, this is such a powerful piece, the narrator delivers the words quietly and with such grace, which adds to the distance between the two. I ask myself, when exactly does the expectation of love turn to indifference? Amazing work my friend, congratulations on taking first place. ~ Mia
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Very kind of you, dear Mia. Thank you. It was my first major publication and inspired me to continue writing at a time I may well have stopped-the first time I was confident someone other than my mum had found something in my writing π
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Ryan, you’re most welcome. I’m glad that you found the inspiration to continue writing, because your work deserves to be shared.
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Wow. I can see why you won. Haunting. Wrenching. Well done.
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Very kind, thank you so much. Grateful for your comment and follow π
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Wow a lot has already been said about your fantastic poem, and I’ll just add that I especially liked these words, “I turn my back with purpose and hear the silence roar”
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Thanks so much, Ivor. Really appreciate it, mate.
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A very touching writing.
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Thank you for reading and taking the time to leave such kind words π
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This is quite taunting… Super amazingπ―π―
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Thank you for reading
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This is mind blowing!!β¨β€οΈ
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Very kind! Thank you π
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Congratulations! You deserve it! I can’t wait to read what you got coming next!
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intense, and I can see why you won =
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Hi, Beth! Lovely to see you again. Thanks for your nice comment. I hope youβre well π
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good to see you too –
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Amazing and WoW!
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Thank you! Most kind
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I love this.
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Thank you
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This hits hard. Thank you for sharing.
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Thank you π
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Just got recommended this! Well written! β€οΈπ
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Thanks so much for reading π
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This is fascinating π
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Such powerful imagery so beautifully expressed!
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Hi, Karima. Thank you for reading and taking time to comment. Truly appreciated!
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My pleasure Ryan…
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Haunting, especially when listening to you read it aloud. Very powerful
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Thanks for listening, Beth. Hope my Aussie accent didnβt kill it π
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I have an Aussie son in law and grandies, and am quite fond of the accent )
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When there’s, nothing left that we can do, but to, wait for, death, to come, and, claim us as, its, own…
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Lovely π
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